Do you agree or disagree with this statement.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.
You should write at least 250 words.
In school, there are some subjects related to animal habitats and their attitudes. And the best way for the pupil to achieve practical experience is by visiting the zoo. Some educational institutions nowadays arrange a day long program in the zoo to meet such kind of animals who are not harmful and the student easily get more details about the animal and their behaviour. Such as In Regent Park Zoo, in London every year thousands of student went/ go there and watched the animal activities/ behaviours to solve their educational activities.
Besides, the uiversity/ university students who are studying zoology they also have also some reasearch/ research work on animals food habit and their activities. And it is not possible to go to jungle frequently to collect some sample every time. So, it is easy to go to the zoo and observe the animals and get the information what they needed. by/ By doing this, they can save their time and money. For instance, In Dubai, they have one of the biggest research institutes at the zoo where thousand of reasearcher/ researchers working/ works on animals habitat.
Moreover, it is impossible to see the green who lives in the city. It is the best way to visit nearest zoo and spent some time to see the nature. It is also good for health when people visitied/ visit to zoo. They get fresh air from the nature and it makes them calm and quiet. which It is not possible to enjoy living in the city areas.
In conclusion, people in the morden/ modern society believe that zoo has many useful purposes not for the purpose of entertainment.
Score : 4.5
1. Tense problem— mixing present and past
2. No argumentative point at the beginning— make the position clear whether you agree or disagree.
3.Punctuation marks has not been used properly
4.Sometimes it is found that ideas are not related to the point
6. Conclusion should be written properly