The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
Sample: 1:
The two pie charts illustrate the difference in percentage of the production of energy in France from 1995 to 2005. Overall, Gas was the most produced energy at the beginning of the period whereas Coal took the place of Gas in 2005.On the other hand, energies other than Gas, Petro, Coal and Nuclear comprise the lowest share in energy production over the period.
Gas contributed to nearly 30% of the energies produced in 1995 which increased to more than 30% in 2005. But Coal became the most produced energy surpassing the production of Gas by a little margin in 2005. On the other hand, production of petro has been reduced by almost 10% over the period of ten years. Nuclear energies have also been produced at approximately 4% higher rate than ten years ago. Other energies continue to have the lowest share among all although there has also been a significant increase of nearly 5% in their production.
In conclusion, there has been a moderate change in the production of various types of energies in France over the period of ten years. Production of all types of energies have an increase except Petro which fall dramatically by 10%. However, Coal has become the most produced energy in 2005 coming from second position in 1995.
Feedback: score near 7.5
Sample 2:
The two pie charts illustrate how much different kinds of energy were produced by France in the year 1995 and 2005.
Overall, coal had contributed as the biggest sector of energy production in the year 1995 and 2005 whereas energy produced other than gas, coal, petroleum and nuclear energy contributed as the least sector.
Coal had contributed as the largest segment in the energy production in 1995 and it rose a little higher in 2005 making up to 30.93% contribution in the whole energy production. Similarly, Gas also contributed almost equally as coal, making up to 30.31% in the year 2005. Energy produced by other sources almost doubled in 2005 and contributed almost 10% in the total production in 2005.
Petroleum production, on the other hand, decreased about 30% from 1995 to 2005 and contributed 19.55% in the total production in 2005. However, production from nuclear energy increased nearly twofold in 2005. In 1995, 6.40% nuclear energy was produced by France which almost doubled in 2005 making approximately one tenth (nice word) of the whole production.
Feedback: score 7.5
The two pie charts illustrate the difference in percentage of the production of energy in France from 1995 to 2005. Overall, Gas was the most produced energy at the beginning of the period whereas Coal took the place of Gas in 2005.On the other hand, energies other than Gas, Petro, Coal and Nuclear comprise the lowest share in energy production over the period.
Gas contributed to nearly 30% of the energies produced in 1995 which increased to more than 30% in 2005. But Coal became the most produced energy surpassing the production of Gas by a little margin in 2005. On the other hand, production of petro has been reduced by almost 10% over the period of ten years. Nuclear energies have also been produced at approximately 4% higher rate than ten years ago. Other energies continue to have the lowest share among all although there has also been a significant increase of nearly 5% in their production.
In conclusion, there has been a moderate change in the production of various types of energies in France over the period of ten years. Production of all types of energies have an increase except Petro which fall dramatically by 10%. However, Coal has become the most produced energy in 2005 coming from second position in 1995.
Feedback: score near 7.5
- Overall, there is lovely presentation. However, it will be better if you can add following things
- Firstly, it is not an essay rather it is a report. Though you can provide conclusion at the end of the report, it is better to provide overview at the beginning I mean after the paraphrase. You can start like, Overall, it can said that” Just you will mention the key point in the over view part.
- Secondly, instead of writing 10%, 5%, 30%, 48%, you can write 5%= insignificant amount/ 30%= precisely one third, 48%= almost half, etc.
Sample 2:
The two pie charts illustrate how much different kinds of energy were produced by France in the year 1995 and 2005.
Overall, coal had contributed as the biggest sector of energy production in the year 1995 and 2005 whereas energy produced other than gas, coal, petroleum and nuclear energy contributed as the least sector.
Coal had contributed as the largest segment in the energy production in 1995 and it rose a little higher in 2005 making up to 30.93% contribution in the whole energy production. Similarly, Gas also contributed almost equally as coal, making up to 30.31% in the year 2005. Energy produced by other sources almost doubled in 2005 and contributed almost 10% in the total production in 2005.
Petroleum production, on the other hand, decreased about 30% from 1995 to 2005 and contributed 19.55% in the total production in 2005. However, production from nuclear energy increased nearly twofold in 2005. In 1995, 6.40% nuclear energy was produced by France which almost doubled in 2005 making approximately one tenth (nice word) of the whole production.
Feedback: score 7.5
- Overall, there is lovely presentation. However, it will be better if you can add following things
- Instead of writing 10%, 5%, 30%, 48%, you can write 5%= insignificant amount/ 30%= precisely one third, 48%= almost half, etc.
- It is better to write over 10 years as an alternative of 1995 and 2005.
